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waking hours


in the waking hours of the day,
when the last taste of nighttime fades,
i imagine you close,
your fingertips,
like water vapor across my skin.

in the final hours of the day,
when the sun is but a small dead patch,
and memories like dry parched land,
take flight like dust.
in the breeze i reach for your hand,
but it cannot be touched.


01.03.08
©2008-2009 ~Telestic
:icontelestic:

Author's Comments

death cab inspiration

first poem of 08. hurray!

*slight edit in the second stanza


im not sure if i like the second stanza...i thought i might of had a fix but i read it over again today and it doesnt seem to need anything...feedback on this subject would be amazing :]

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:icondiehardguardgirl:
I am SO GLAD to see your poetry. The other poets I'm subscribed to have been disappointing, and I'd forgotten how lovely and refreshing your style is. Kudos, and keep writing!

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"Life to the everlasting cat"
:icontelestic:
thank you thank you so much for the lovely comment :] thats nice to hear considering this is my first poem in quite a long time. good to know i've still got it. a friend of mine mentioned awhile back that my poetry had become, well, very unpoetrylike. thanks for taking the time to read and comment! :hug:

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:iconmystiful91:
WOOOW i jsut answered the question i asked you myself
you write poetry too!!!
omg i love it!!! uve got such a great talent! :D
keep up the great writing!! its inspiring! haha
:icontelestic:
:] muchas gracias...lo aprecio mucho!!! y tambien, gracias para el favorito!!! :dance:

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I'm a member of *HDR-Club *night-shots and *SkyAndNatureClub
:iconmystiful91:
jajajaj no hay problema
vale la pena ponerlo en mis favoritos jajaja ;)

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